Your English-speaking friend who lives in your town has asked for your advice about leaning a new sport. Write an email to your friend. In your email •Recommend a new sport that would be suitable for your friend to learn •Explain how your friend could learn this sport •Suggest that you both learn this sport together.

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Hi
, I was thinking about what you said about learning a new sport. I`ve just figured out that they have a tennis course at Nesodden, we
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both
could join. The class starts
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on Monday at
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monday 18.00 Since you would like to get in shape and start a workout journey, I suggest
tennis
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that tennis
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will be the perfect activity for you.
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Its a good way to meet other
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individuals
and make friends and do a
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social
activity together.
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Moreover
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we could sign up together and do
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activiety
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activity
on a weekly basis.
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Furthermore
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it will help your wrist, which has become so
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to losen
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up.
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it might be hard in the
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our
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bodies
will thank us
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after
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while
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.
This
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is our chance to get in shape
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I suggest that we take it.
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Previously
I
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played
tennis in my younger days
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I remember
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it
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gave me so much—
both
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apply
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new friends, challenges, and a sense of achievement. Anyways Im looking forward
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reply xx your best
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friend

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coherence cohesion
Write a clear start and end. Say why you write in the first line, and end with a friendly last line.
coherence cohesion
Group ideas in clear parts. One part for the sport, one part for how to learn it, and one part for learning together.
task achievement
Add more clear detail about how your friend can learn tennis, like the place, time, teacher, and practice plan.
task achievement
Check that every sentence is easy to follow. Some parts have word and grammar mistakes, so the meaning is not always clear.
task achievement
You answered all parts of the task: you chose a sport, said how to learn it, and asked to do it together.
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Your email has a friendly tone, which is good for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You use linking words like 'also', 'moreover', and 'furthermore' to connect ideas.
coherence cohesion
You give a personal example about playing tennis before, and this helps support your idea.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • suitable
  • facilities
  • physical capabilities
  • interests
  • local club
  • hiring a coach
  • online resources
  • practice sessions
  • motivating
  • attending classes
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