A friend you met last year has invited you to visit him/her in his/her country. You have never been there before and need some information before you leave. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: request advise about a gift for his/her family ask about activities and clothing in his/her country find out about the food.

Dear Sara, I am writing
this
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email to inform you that I am really excited about visiting your country for the first time
this
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summer. I already
heared alot
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heard a lot
about it, but
unfortunatly
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unfortunately
, it is lacking
alot
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a lot
of the important information.
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, I would appreciate it if you
tell
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me more about its weather, culture, and the most important ceremonies that will
held
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be held
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while
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my visiting.
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, and before all of that, I want you to help me
choosing
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choose
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a suitable gift for your parents because I know that they will love
this
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very much. For
instant
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, I am
strugglling
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struggling
because I do not know if I should give them a special large bottle of oil from my own garden as a
souviner
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souvenir
or
giving
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something more meaningful.
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I am very restricted about my type of clothes,
but
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apply
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I need you to inform me about
types
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the types
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of clothing in your country and if there is any special dress or
scpecial colore
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special colour
to wear.
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, you
alredy
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already
know that I am a muslim
,
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.
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, I want to know if there are any halal dishes to eat because we are already in Ramadan, so
this
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issue is very important. I hope
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email finds you very well. I am waiting for your response. Yours sincerely, Halla Rabeea

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some points need more clear detail.
task response
Task response: Ask more direct questions about food, clothes, and things to do.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some long lines are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use short clear sentences and link words like and, but, so, because.
task response
Task response: You cover the gift, clothes, activities, and food.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • gift, present, family, advice, country, visit, travel, clothes, weather, warm, light, shoes, food, meal, dish, try, spicy, sweet, family home, local place, famous place, comfortable, useful, tradition, bring, enjoy
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