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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inform my problem . I've lost my student identification card in the past few days. I have been looking for my card.
However
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, I could not have found it.
That is
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 I have some problems. First of all, I cannot get into the library to study English and prepare for my presentation.
In addition
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, I cannot get a discount at a restaurant.
Moreover
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, I cannot buy a train ticket, because I cannot prove that I am a student.
Therefore
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, I would like to get my new student identification card as soon as possible. So, it would be helpful
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 if you could tell me about the price and date. I would appreciate it if you could reply to my message as soon as you can. Yours sincerely, Kazuya Nakagawa

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one or two more clear details about when and where you lost the card.
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Task response: Use more exact words for your problem, for example say you cannot use campus services without the card.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter is easy to follow, but some linking words are a bit simple. Try to join ideas in a more natural way.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check small grammar parts like 'inform you of my problem' and 'I could not find it' because these can make the flow less smooth.
task response
Task response: You cover all three points in the task.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and right for a letter to student services.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has one main idea.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Identification card
  • Student ID
  • Lost
  • Misplaced
  • Access
  • Campus facilities
  • Library access
  • Gym membership
  • Discounts
  • Pass verification
  • Student status
  • Urgent
  • Issuance
  • Replacement
  • Procedure
  • Fee
  • Documentation
  • Assistance
  • Resolution
  • Prompt
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