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The table below gives information about past and projected population figures in various countries for different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table charts compare past and projected
population
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number
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numbers
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 in
diffrent
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different
 countries (
Australia
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,
Canada
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, New
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zealand
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Zealand
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, United
States
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) between 1990 and 2025.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the US accounted for the largest share of the
population
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 over the period,
while
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 New
xealand
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Zealand
 accounted for the smallest share. Other countries accounted for
a
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moderate figures.
According to
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The
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the
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 United
States
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 was
population
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in 1990 at
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of the United States in 1990 was
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 249.9
,
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million, while
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while
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Canada
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Canada's population
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 was 26.6
.
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million.
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 The next year
increased to
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, the population increased to
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population
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 258.2 in
The
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the
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 United
States
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 and slightly rose
28.5
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to 28.5
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. In 2000 and 2020
was grow
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, growth was
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 around 275.1 and 320.6 in
The
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the
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 United
States
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.
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Canada was
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The
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population
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at
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of Canada in
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 2000 and 2020
about
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was about
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 31.0 and 36.9
.
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million, respectively.
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 The United
States
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 and
Canada
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 will rosing
population
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about
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of about
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 349.0 and 39.0
in
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apply
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over the period. On the other
hend
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hand
,
Australia
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,
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apply
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and New
Zealand
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 was
population
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 at 17.1 and 3.4 in 1990.
Than
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Then
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 it
inceased
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increased
 only 0.6 and .1.
2000
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and
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to
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 2020 was
population
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growed
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grew
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 19.2 and 22.7 in
Australia
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,
the
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and over the
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 same two
year
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years
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,
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the
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population
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inceased
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increased
 3.8 and 3.8 in New
Zealand
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 .
Finnaly
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Finally
,
Australia
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 and New
Zealand
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 will
day by day growing
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grow day by day
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 at 26.0 and 4.7 end of during.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, australia, canada, zealand, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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