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Some people believe that learning practical skills (like cooking, fixing things, or managing money) is more important than learning academic subjects (like history, math, or science). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of the most topic that people discussed
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 every
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 of these two types of
skills
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 have a positive side
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 it's important to learn.
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 of the main positive thing about learning practical
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 like an example " cooking " that you won't put your self into pressure, and you can do
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 skill without any conditiosns, as foucsing and going to a quite place, and you can practice it with other people in the same time, in the opposite side when you practice the academic
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 you should foucs much more than you foucs on the practical exercises. On the other
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 of the
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benefits
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,
as an
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example
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 " history "
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 will help you to open your mind and give you the knowledge that you need in your life.
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addition
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 there is a study in 2023
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is
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more than 40% of 100
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celebrities
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 prefer to practice academic
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 because it makes them relaxed and gives them the power to
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 when they come back to work in a more active way. In conclusion,
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 up to the person and
his life style
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their lifestyle
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 and what
he needs
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they need
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 from these
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, because it doesn't have a negative side. If the person
want
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 to
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focus
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skills
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 when he
alone
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is alone
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, he will prefer the
acadimec skilsl
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academic skills
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 the other person will like to do a practical
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skill
 if he loves the social connecting with
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others.

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task response
Give a clear answer in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or partly agree.
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Add more clear ideas for each main point. Explain why practical skills and academic subjects are important.
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Use real and clear examples. Some examples in your essay are not strong or fully linked to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph focus on one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.
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You answered both sides of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
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You try to use examples to support your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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