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Writing Samples
Band 3

Some people believe that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others argue that individuals should take action to protect it.

Governments
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 play a key role in keeping the environment clean and better for citizens.There is an argument about the importance of involving locals to protect
environment
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the environment
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 and reduce the rates of issues ,
such
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 as air pollution.Both beliefs
reasonable
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are reasonable
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 , but I tend to believe that
governments
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has
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have
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 more control on various aspects. First of all, improving public transport in areas will decrease
cars
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car
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 emissions
which
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, which
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usually
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are usually
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considerd
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considered
 as a main factor of air pollution.
Also
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, offering eco-friendly cars
in
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at
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 affordable prices for citizens could be
benefical
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beneficial
.
For example
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, many
of
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apply
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developed countries ,like
Japana
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Japan
 and Korea promoting a new trend of a significant decline in the
numbers
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number
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 of cars on roads.Following all these solutions can assist
governments
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to
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in
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 maintaining a safe place for living for
the
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apply
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future generations.
On the other hand
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, there is a common argument about the essential role of society’s members in keeping their nations harmless and
effecitve
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effective
.
Furthermore
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,promoting awareness of the
necessaity
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necessity
 of recycling to protect the earth from different detrimental issues.Teachers and schools have an important role
to enhance
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in enhancing
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 the concept of recycling for their students to prevent serious problems. In conclusion,
governments
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 and individuals both are responsible
about
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for
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 protecting
environment
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the environment
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 ,
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however
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however,
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 I think that countries should be
more strict
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stricter
 and
determaind
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determined
 in order to find more options and solutions for
transportations
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transportation
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 and jam

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task response
Answer both sides more fully. You talk about government more than people.
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Make your main opinion very clear in each body part and in the end.
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Use more clear and real examples to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Put a clear topic sentence at the start of each body paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, on the other hand, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order and grammar so your ideas are easier to follow.
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You answer the topic and give your opinion.
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You include both views in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words to move from one idea to the next.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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