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Band 4.5

In many countries, plastic shopping bags are the main source of rubbish, causing pollution on land and in the water, so people think they should be ban. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Land and water contamination
become
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most
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the most
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 common problem among various nations.
people
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People
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 believe that the primary cause for
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 is
regularlly
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regular
 usage of
plastic
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 carry
bags
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 at shopping or packing ,
hence
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government
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the government
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 should stop productions of
such
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 kind of
bags
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 for
betterment
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the betterment
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 of
environment
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the environment
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.I completely agree with
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 idea and
also
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 discuss
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a few
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 alternatives that we will use
instead
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 of
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plastic made
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plastic-made
bags
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. First and foremost ,
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the primary
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 reason for banning
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 kind of
bags
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 is that it takes ages to decompose completely
from
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on
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 land or
sea
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at sea
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. To be precise , there are various exprements have been done to understand
harmful
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the harmful
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effect
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effects
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 of
plastic
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 products
in
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on
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 our
nature
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environment
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.
Additionaly
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Additionally
, in the process of
plastic
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bags
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bag
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 production, various companies drain their
wastage
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waste
 material to
near by
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nearby
 rivers or local damping aeres,
consequently
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 both become polluted .
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, A famous youtuber Mr Raj upload myraid contents that relates with detremental effect of
plastic
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bags
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 with some scientific evidence .
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,
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 it is quite difficult to manage some things without
usage
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the use
 of
plastic
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bags
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 , there are
such
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 alternative ways,
such
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 as
wood made
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wood-made
bags
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 and recycling of previously produced
bags
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 .To add more,
Government
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the government
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 should encourage small buisnesses for set up recycling units by giving subsidies
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as
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 well as spread awerness of
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the dangerous
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 outcomes of
plastic
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 by
organizing
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 seminars at
school
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schools
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 and colleges .To
site
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cite
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 an example of 'Social foundation of
india '
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India'
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 which works on
motto
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the motto
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 "
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Plastic free
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Plastic-free
 world" IN conclusion ,
As
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as
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plastic
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bags
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 become a fundamental source of land and water pollution ,
govenment
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governments
 and
buisnesses
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businesses
 should
comes
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come
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 up with other options to
prevent
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protect
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 our nature .

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task response
Answer the question more directly in each body part. Say clearly why you agree, and keep this idea strong from start to end.
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Add one or two simple and real examples. Your examples now are not very clear or strong.
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Develop each main idea more. Explain how plastic bags harm land and water in a simple step by step way.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer paragraphing. One paragraph for one main idea helps the reader follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, for example, however, and in conclusion. Do not use too many long or unclear linkers.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence connects well to the next one. Some parts now feel broken or hard to follow.
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You give a clear opinion: you agree with the ban.
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You talk about both the problem and some other options, so your essay covers important parts of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use linking words to join ideas.
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