The bar chart compares the favourite leisure activities of teenage boys and girls in Canada.

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The graph

illustrate

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illustrates

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the favourite leisure activities of teenage

boys

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moreover

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and

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girls

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in Canada.

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, the

boys

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have

many

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activities than

girls

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especilly on shopping,

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the

girls

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have the

seam

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same advantage

precantage

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in music. The first

chart

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is Sports the

precantage

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of the

boys

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chart

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increased than

girls

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,the

precantage

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boys

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chart

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is 25% and

girls

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chart

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is 10%

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in computer games

chart

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the

boys

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chart

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rose until 20%but the

girls

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chart

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decreased until 15% and the Music

chart

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has a seam

precantage

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all of it is 25%for the both

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we can sharp increased on Shopping

chart

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espisfc for the

Boys

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and sharp decreased for the

Girls

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, precantage, chart with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 9 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

108 words

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The bar chart compares the favourite leisure activities of teenage boys and girls in Canada.

Procrastination, or the act of delaying a task, has been cited in some research articles as one of the factors for poor academic performance by some university students. What are some of the reasons behind students procrastinating, and what measures can be taken to address the problem?

You participated in a public event organized at a local park. Write a letter to the event organizer. In your letter tell them some feedback about the event; explain what you particularly enjoyed; give some suggestions for improvement.

Advanced medically treatments are generally expensive People's access to healthcare should not depend on their level of income.Allpeople have the right to access the best medicine available .To what extent do you agree or disagree.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?