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The provided graph illustrates China and India population from 2000 to today, as well as growth predictions to 2050. Summarise the information by by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided graph illustrates
China
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's and
India
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's population from 2000 to today,
as well as
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 growth predictions to 2050.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
population
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the population
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 of
India
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 is lower than
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that of China's
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China's society,
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China;
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however
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however,
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 it is estimated that the roles will reverse in the
year
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 2030.
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, in
2000
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2000,
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 there were around 1,250
billions
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China
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 residents,
while
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 the number of citizens of
India
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 was 1,000
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billions
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billion
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.
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, the sum of
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India
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India's
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 inhabitants went upwards, and is anticipated to continue, but
China
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's
public
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population
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 is predicted to rise more slowly until 2030 and
then
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 fall
down
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apply
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.
Furthermore
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, both populations are estimated to reach about 1,450
billions
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 in the
year
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 2030. In comparison, the
amount
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number
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 of people living in
India
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 is expected to grow gradually, and reach 1,600
billions
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 in the
year
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 2050. Meanwhile, it is forecast that the number of folks in
China
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 will start to drop slightly after the
year
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 2030, and will come to 1,400
billions
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 in 2050.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words china, india, year, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provided" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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