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Last week you were on a flight to London. Unfortunately, when you got off the plane, you left a bag there. You did not remember about the bag until you got to your hotel. Write a letter to the airline. In your letter explain what has happened describe the bag and its contents say what you would like them to do about this problem

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Dear
Mr.
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Mr
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 Paul, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about my bag
which
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, which
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 I left on
the
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one of your British Airways aeroplanes yesterday
April
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, April
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 18. I was flying from Calgary to London on April 18 on flight BA 1432. I safely landed
to
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at
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 London airport and quickly
off-board
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got off
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 the plane as I was late to reach my office for an important meeting. I left my bag on my seat. It was my personal
bagage
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baggage
 which
consists
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consisted
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 of my office work laptop, work files, important printouts and passport. Since I can manage without my office laptop, my documents and passport are crucial to get it back. I would like to request
to do
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a
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 quick check on seat B34 of the plane I was
onboard
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on board
 and inquire in loss and found department at London
international airport
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International Airport
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 as well. If you found my bag, let me
contact
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know
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 on my
phon
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phone
.
e
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If
,
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 you have my number in your records, I will pick it up
on
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tomorrow
moring
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morning
 from
airport
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the airport
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. Thank you for your support. Your Faithfully, Jay Prajapati

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not fully clear. Say more clearly when and where you left the bag.
task response
Task response: The tone is a bit uneven. Use polite and clear request forms all the way.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order is good, but some lines are hard to follow because of word form and grammar errors.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Linking is basic. Use simple link words like first, then, and so, to make the story flow better.
task response
Task response: You cover the three bullet points: what happened, what is in the bag, and what you want the airline to do.
coherence cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, and each paragraph has one main idea.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unfortunate incident
  • Flight details
  • Distraction
  • Valuable possessions
  • Sentimental value
  • Lost and found procedure
  • Safe return
  • Compensation
  • Assistance
  • Gratitude
  • Follow-up
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