The table shows the percentages of students who chose four different subjects at a university in 2010 and 2020

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The table shows the percentages of students who chose four different subjects at a university in 2010 and 2020.
Overall
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, Business became more popular over the period,
while
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Engineering and Arts declined.
By contrast
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, Computer Science remained stable. In 2010, Engineering was the most popular subject at 30%,
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Business was the least popular at 20%. Arts and Computer Science were equal at 25% each. In 2020, Business rose significantly to 35%, becoming the leading subject. Engineering fell slightly to 25%,
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Arts dropped to 15%. Computer Science,
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, stayed unchanged at 25%.

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