The graph shows the percentage of 15-year-olds with low literacy (reading and writing) levels in four countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features making comparisons where relevant.

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The graph illustrates the
proportion
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of 15-year-olds with their reading and writing skills in Austria,
Ireland
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,
Sweden
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,
Denmark
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and Denmark
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. The data
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is measured
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in
percentage
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.
Overall
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, teenagers have
more
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a higher
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interest
low
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in
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literacy
early
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in Denmark in their early years
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years
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in Denmark,
while
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end
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at the end
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of
years
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it was
lowest
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the lowest
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proportion
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. After
steady
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steadily
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increasing
Austria
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, Austria
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shows
highest
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the highest
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percentage
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of
students
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in
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last
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recent
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years
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. In 2000,
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proportion
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the proportion
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of
students
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were
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apply
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in Austria
witnessed
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was
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just under 15, before
rose
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rising
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sharply till 2003 reach approximately 21
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percentage
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per cent
. From 2003 to 2006 increase moderately
23
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by 23
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,
last
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three
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years
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years,
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it climbed
28
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by 28
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percentage
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per cent
.
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Percentage
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The percentage
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of teenagers
accoundes
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accounted
for in
Sweden
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and
Ireland
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in 2000 was 11 and 13
respecitively
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respectively
throughout three
years
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. The
percentage
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of
students
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slightly
increase
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increased
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between 2003 and 2006
slightly increase
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apply
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in
Ireland
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13
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, 13
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,
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Sweden
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and Sweden
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15
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, 15
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. In 2009,
students
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have same interest in reading and writing in
Sweden
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and
Ireland
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, about 18. In Denmark, higest
proportion
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of teenagers
in
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is in
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early
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their early
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years
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17
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, 17
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,
while
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next
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in the next
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3
years
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it declined to 13.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, it decreased over
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years
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the years
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and dropped
in
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to
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11
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percentage
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per cent
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in 2006, the
fell in
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apply
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lowest
proportion
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in
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In
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2009, 10
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percentage
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per cent

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, ireland, sweden, percentage, years, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 8 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Literacy levels
  • Percentage
  • 15-year-olds
  • Low literacy
  • Reading and writing skills
  • Trends and patterns
  • Comparison
  • Significant differences
  • Similarities
  • Education systems
  • Socio-economic conditions
  • Main findings
  • Improvements
  • Positive trends
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