The graph below shows the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph
illustrate
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that the daily consumption of three spreads per person from 1981 to 2007 in a country.
Overall
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, both margarine and butter share similiar route
form
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from
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1991 to the end of
period
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the period
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.
However
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, the
low fat
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low-fat
& reduced spreads have the sharply growth from 1996 to 2001. First of all, the
grams
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of margarine have slightly
fluctuation
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fluctuated
,
bwtween
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between
80
to
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and
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100 in 1981 to 1991.
Afterward
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Afterwards
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, it is gradually decreased
at
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over
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the next 15 years.
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Similarily
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Similarly
, butter has a
slightly
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slight
increase, from 140
grams
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to 160
grams
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in 1981 to 1986.
However
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, it
decline remarkablely
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declined remarkably
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from 160
grams
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to 50
grams
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at the end
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of 2007.
On the other hand
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,
low fat
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low-fat
& reduced spreads show a significant growth from 10
grams
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to 80
grams
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in
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from
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1996 to 2001, but fall slightly to 70
grams
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in the end.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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