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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

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The diagram illustrates how british consume fast food from 1970
until
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 1990.
Overall
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, there is a huge rise in the
consumption
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for
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of
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 both Hamburgers and Fish.
However
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,
the
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pizza
consumption
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is
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has been
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 slightly decreasing over the years. In terms of
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fish,
the
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their
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consumption
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of them
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apply
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had gradually increased from the
year
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 1970
until
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 1980.
Subsencualty
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Subsequently
, from 1980 until
1990
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1990,
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 the
consumption
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 had rapidly increased,
while
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 the fish & chips
has rised
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had risen
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 a higher amount than hamburgers, approximately by 70
at the
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in
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year
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 1980 and around 100
for the years
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in
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 1985 and 1990.
On the other hand
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, Pizza shows a steady decrease in its
consumption
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and
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 it is around 100 from the
year
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 1970
until
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to
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 1985. Ultimately, the
consumsion
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consumption
 has increased by 10
at
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in
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 the
year
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 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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