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Your manager has invited you to work on a team project He/she has asked you to suggest another employee to work on the project with you, Write a letter to your manager. In your letter explain 1 why you are interested in the project 2 suggest another employee and say why he she would be suitable 3 ask your manager some questions about the project

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Dear
Mr.
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 Sharma, I am writing
this
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 letter to share my opinion
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that
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 Miss Tina
is
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should be included in
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 the new Corporate Social Responsibility (CSR)
project
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 of planting new trees in the community. I am really excited for the opportunity to actively undertake the responsibility of the new CSR
project
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 because
this
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 gives me the chance to not only contribute to
environment
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environmental
 protection but
also
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 to represent the
organization
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 and its efforts towards
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community safety. I would like to suggest including Miss Tina for her active social media profile, as these days social media platforms are the best way to spread information. By including her in
this
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 initiative, more people are likely to connect with
environment
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environmental
 protection. At the same
time
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 acknowledge the efforts of the company. Indeed, it is a way to advertise
about
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the corporation
which
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, which
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 is likely
promote
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 the business in the long run. Regarding the
project
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, I would appreciate
to get
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getting
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 the information
of
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on
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 the budget and time expected to be
utilized
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 for
this
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 task. Having
an
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early access to these expectations would allow me to draw a practically feasible plan. I am very thankful for
this
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 opportunity and hope that my suggestion will prove to be the best for
this
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project
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. I look forward to hearing back from you soon. Yours faithfully, Gurjeet Kaur

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task response
Make your purpose more clear in the first part. Say you want to join the project and suggest Tina.
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Ask more direct questions about the project, like the start date, team size, and your main role.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully so each idea flows in a smooth way.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph focused on one main point and avoid adding too many side ideas.
task response
You answered all three parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear opening and closing.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs are mostly in a good order.
task response
Your reason for choosing Tina is easy to understand.
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