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The table gives information about the amount of water used for three different sectors in Egypt, Saudi Arabia, New Zealand, and Canada

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The table compares the proportion of
water
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 usage
against
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in three categories in four different countries.
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, using
water
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 in agricultural
way
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ways
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 dominated in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, and in New Zealand and Canada for
industry
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 supplied the
most
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largest
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 amount of
water
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.
While
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 domestic
use
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 of it was prioritised less. In Egypt and Saudi
Arabia
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Arabia,
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 agriculture accounted for 82% and 64%, respectively.Combined,
industry
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 and domestic
use
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 of
water
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 made up 18% for
Egypt
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Egypt's water use
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.In Saudi
Arabia
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Arabia,
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 the percentage of
usage
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water usage
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water
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 supply for
industry
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 showed 30%
and
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, and
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 for domestic
use
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 was five times less than
it
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that
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(5%). In New
Zealand
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Zealand,
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 the biggest sector of
water
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 used for
industry
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,
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 46%,
while
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 agriculture was
on the
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 second place with 44%.Domestic
use
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 demonstrated the lowest percentage in New Zealand(10%).In
Canada
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Canada,
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 agriculture made up 10%,
proportion
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the proportion
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 of domestic
use
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showed
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doubled
number
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apply
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(20%).Canada's
industry
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 used the
most
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largest
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 amount
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water
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of water
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 among
three
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the three
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 categories,70%. сколько ты мне поставишь

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, industry, use with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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