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The maps below show the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps below show the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The maps illustrate the comparison of the significant development in Ryemouth between 1995 and
present
Correct article usage
the present
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.
Overall
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,
this
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 village underwent several obvious
modernizations
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modernisations
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.
To begin
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 with,
on
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at
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 the top of the
map
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, the
street
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 ended with housing. Nowadays,
as a result
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 of additions of housing nearby, the
street
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 has been improved to have a way past the group of houses. On the North-East of the
map
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, farmland and forest park have been replaced by golf and tennis courts
respectively
Punctuation problem
, respectively
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. On the corner of the main
street
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 in the South-East direction, there was only the hotel
in
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on
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 the past
map
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. The car park has been added next to it in the present one.
However
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, the cafe across the
street
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 remained the same through
decades
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the decades
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, unlike the total change on the slightly left
side
Punctuation problem
side,
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 where shops and fish markets have been replaced by restaurants and apartments
accordingly
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.
Due to
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 the replacement of the fish markets, the fishing port
on
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at
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 the bottom of the
map
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, street with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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