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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts in 2012 and the prediction for 2030.

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The given pie
charts
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compares
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compare
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 the percentage of
energy
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capacity
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 in gigawatts in 2015 and the projections for 2040.
Overall
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, from
both
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charts
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charts,
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 the biggest
share
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 of
energy
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capicity
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capacity
 is in fossil
fuels
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Then
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, the second biggest figure of
energy
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capity
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capacity
 in each
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charts
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chart
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 is other
renewables
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 any other
sources
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 from
both
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charts
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 do not have a significant amount of
energy
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capacity
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compare
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compared
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 to
fossill
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fossil
fuels
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 and other
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renewables
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renewable
sources
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.
First,
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in
2015
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2015,
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 the biggest percentage of
energy
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capicity
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capacity
 came from fossil
fuels
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more
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, more
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 than 50
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percents
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
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, the second biggest
share
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 of
energy
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capicity
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capacity
 came from other
renewables
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 that reached 23
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percents
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per cent
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.
However
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, the rest of the
sources
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 do not have significant contributions
for
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to
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 the
energy
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capacity
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,
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;
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 three of them did not reach more than seven
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percents
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per cent
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.
Moreover
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, the bar projection for 2040 shows the two
first
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apply
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biggest
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share
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shares
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 of
energy
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capacity
capicity
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 still come from the same
sources
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like
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as
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 in 2025,
that
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which
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 will likely reach 44 and 21
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percents
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per cent
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. But, it
is
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shows that in 2040, the percentage of
energy
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capicity
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both
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 from
solar
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both solar
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 and wind
,
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apply
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 will
has
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have
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 a slight
differences
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difference
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,
they reach
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reaching
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 around 18 and 12
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percents
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per cent
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.
Lastly
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, the smallest
share
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 of
energy
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capacity
capicity
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 will come from nuclear,
that
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which
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 only
reach
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reaches
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 five
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percents
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per cent
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.
To sum up
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,
both
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 of the
charts
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depicts
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depict
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 that the biggest
share
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 of
energy
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capicity
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capacity
 is in fossil
fuels
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.
Moreover
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, the second biggest figure of
energy
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capity
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capacity
 in each
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charts
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chart
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 is other
renewables
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.
However
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, any other
sources
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 from
both
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charts
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 do not have a significant amount of
energy
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capacity
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compare
Wrong verb form
compared
show examples
 to
fossill
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fossil
fuels
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 and other
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renewables
Replace the word
renewable
sources
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, moreover".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words charts, energy, capacity, both, share, capicity, fuels, renewables, sources, percents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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