You have bought a new mobile phone and in a few days of purchase, it has stopped working. You have spoken to the company representative a week ago but it has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company. In your letter, » introduce yourself » explain the situation » say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to request the replacement of my newly purchased
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. My name is Salieu, and I reside in 4 Consider
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, Freetown. I purchased the handset
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Monday. Unfortunately, after two to three days of use,
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software displayed
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eventually the screen went black. I promptly contacted customer care and filed a complaint under the reference number T8625. Despite assurances from your representative that the issue will be resolved within a week, it is now Friday of the following week, and I have not received any communication from your company.
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, I would greatly appreciate it if you could personally look into
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I have fulfilled all the requirements for the replacement of the product, and I kindly request that you initiate the replacement process for my mobile phone to avoid potential legal
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. I trust you will investigate my complaint thoroughly and take necessary action as soon as possible. Your's faithfully, Salieu Barrie.

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task response
For task response: say more clearly when you bought the phone and what happened after that.
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For task response: ask for one clear action, like a new phone or your money back.
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For coherence and cohesion: check the closing. Write 'Yours faithfully' not 'Your's faithfully'.
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For task response: the problem is clear and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: the letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
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For coherence and cohesion: each paragraph has one main idea.
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