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Some school children have less natural ability to learn other languages. Therefore, it is not right to force these school children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Learning a foreign
language
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 can be challenging for some
school
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childern
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children
 who have
diffeculty learnig
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difficulty learning
 new languages. People believe that they should not be
foreced
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forced
 to learn them.
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However
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 I totally
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disagree
, and think
school
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 pupils can master learning any
languages
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language
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 by using
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different
 learning
stratiegies
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strategies
 and learning styles.
Body · 1
School
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 students who have
diffeculty
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difficulty
 learning a
foregin
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foreign
language
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 should be forced to learn by using
certian
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certain
 teaching plans.
For example
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, dividing pupils into groups in a special
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class
 for their educational
language
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 level. They will receive the information
that is
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 on their level.
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as
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As
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 a result, they will feel motivated to learn and study.
Body · 2
Learning styles are different
in
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 every
students
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 who
are
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is
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 having
hard
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a hard
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 time learning a foreign
language
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Therfore
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Therefore
, knowing what
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the right one is
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 for pupils will make it easy to learn.
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,
childern
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children
 learn better when talking or using flashcards.
Other
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Others
 might
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prefer
 listening to
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music
while
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 learning.
Conclusion
In summary, learning a new
languages
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language
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 is possible with
school
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has
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have
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 less ability to learn it.
The
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They
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 will be able to learn it by using stratigics plan and learning
styels
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styles
.

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task response
Answer the question more fully. Say why you disagree, and also show why some people think this way.
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Make your main ideas clearer. One idea for each body paragraph is best.
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Use examples with more detail. Your examples are good, but they are very short.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more clearly. Use words like First, Also, For example, and As a result.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence order. Some sentences are hard to follow because the words are not in the best place.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one clear topic and support it with 2 or 3 related sentences.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction.
coherence and cohesion
You use paragraphs, and this helps the reader follow your essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have both an introduction and a conclusion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural ability
  • foreign language
  • aptitude
  • cognitive benefits
  • cultural understanding
  • individualized learning
  • education systems
  • one-size-fits-all curriculum
  • motivation
  • engagement
  • negative attitudes
  • equal opportunities
  • skill development
  • strengths and weaknesses
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