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Part 1: The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were imported (in thousand tonnes) in 2012.

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The bar charts compare 4 different types of citrus fruits and the main countries to
where
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 they were transported in 2012.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 oranges were imported considerably more than lemons and grapefruits. Notably, others accounted for the lowest figure. In the US, Oranges were imported largely to South Africa
standing
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, standing
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 at 1000.000
tonnes
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,
while
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 Egypt and
United
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the United
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 States imported 600.000
tonnes
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 and 500.000
tonnes
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 respectively.
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, the number of lemons accounted for 500.000
tonnes
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 in Mexico,almost triple the figure of the US(200.000
tonnes
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).
Argentine
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Argentina
 imported by far the lowest number of lemons, representing 100.000
tonnes
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. Grapefruits were imported by Turkey(400.000
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), followed
distatly
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distantly
by Mexico (300.000
tonnes
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) and the United States(300.000
tonnes
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). Other citrus fruits were predominantly imported to Mexico, with the figures standing at 500.000
tonnes
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, greater than the combined total of Egypt(1000
tonnes
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) and the US(1000
tonnes
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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