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A good friend has just changed schools and is having difficulty fitting in and needs your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • make suggestions as to how they could make friends • suggest joining clubs, participating in school activities • give any extra general advice You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear...,

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Dear Andre, Settling
in
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into
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 a new
school
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 is a difficult task
but
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, but
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 there are various ways to make
this
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 process easy and fun. I would recomment to join a club that you
like
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like,
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 since you
always
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have always
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 been into
sports
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sports,
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 you should try one of the sports
club
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clubs
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. It will help you to connect with people and broaden your circle.
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Also
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 you should
participating
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participate
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 in
school
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 activities like the annual sports day
that is
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 around the corner. Working with the
organizing
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organising
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 group will give
boost
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a boost
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 to your standing in class and
the
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apply
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in the whole
school
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. One more thing
I
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, I
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highly recommend giving group study a shot
, studying
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. Studying
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 with your classmates
make
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makes
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 you feel like a team and helps you bond over subjects you are good at and
also
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 tests you fail at too. I hope my advice helps your
school
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 life a little easier. Best wishes, Anmol

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task response
Task response: Add one more clear idea about how to talk to new people in class.
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Task response: Check small word forms like 'recommend', 'participate', and 'makes' to make your meaning more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put each main idea in its own paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use easy link words like 'First', 'Also', and 'Finally' to guide the reader.
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Task response: You answer all parts of the letter and give useful advice.
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Task response: The tone is friendly and good for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and a clear ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are easy to follow most of the time.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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