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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and marker comparisons where relevant

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The line graph illustrates the
precentage
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percentage
 of tourists to
UK
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the UK
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 who visited four different attractions in Brighton.
Overall
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, Festival visitors had a period of stability.
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, Pier tourists
flucteated
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fluctuated
 over
the
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time. Pavilion had the highest visitors in the middle of the time.
Art
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The art
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 gallery had the lowest
visitors
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number of visitors
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at the end
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 of the time. By 1980, pier accounted for 10%
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 five years later, it had a gradual rise to under 20%.
by
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By
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 1990, it decreased slightly to 10%, the following five years, it increased slightly to above 10%. By 2000, it rose slightly to under 20%. By 2005, it had a significant increase to 20%. In the first
of the
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period,
Art
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the Art
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 gallery stood for 20%, from 1980 to 1985, it had a gradual rise to under 40%. The five years following, it decreased dramatically to 20%. By 1995, it remained the same at 20%. From 2000 to 2010, it had
gradual
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a gradual
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 decline to under 10%. By 1980,
festival
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the festival
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,
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 started with 30%,
from1985
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from 1985
 to 1995, it had a slight decrease to under 30%, and it stayed the same. Until 1995, it had a slight increase to exactly under 30%
,
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 from 2000 to 2010, it remained the same at under 30%. Pavilion started with above 20%,
by
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and by
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 1985, it had a slight increase to under 30%. From 1985 to 1995, it went up significantly ,until 1995,
it
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when it
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 stopped with under 50%. From 1995 to 2000, it went down dramatically to above 30%
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.
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 From 2000 to 2010, it decreased slightly to 30%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 7 times.
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