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You and some friends ate a meal at a restaurant to celebrate a special occasion, and you were very pleased with the food and services. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter Give details of your visit to the restaurant Explain the reason for the celebration Say what was good about the food and the services

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Dear Manager,
Recently
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Recently,
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 we visited your
restaurant
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 to celebrate a special occasion
,
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.
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 I invited my family and
friends
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 for my birthday celebration
and
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, and
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 our experience was great. Even before arriving, the reservation process was extremely smooth
even
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, even
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 though getting
reservation
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a reservation
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 in your
restaurant
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 is troublesome. On arriving
to
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at
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 the
restaurant
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, your staff greeted us warmly
and
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, and
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 the
ambiance
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ambience
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 was enchanting. The decor of the
restaurant
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 was elegant
and
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, and
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 our family
friends
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 were pleased with their personalized sitting arrangements. Everyone at the table was satisfied with
range
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the range
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 of varied cuisine,
specially
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especially
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 the
mexican
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Mexican
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 menu had numerous options. A server named Anna is
jack
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a jack
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 of all trades, she seems to know all the ingredients of different available
cuisine
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cuisines
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. We ordered Italian pizza and
mexican
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Mexican
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 burritos
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 they were extremely delicious. The chef went out of his way to make a
customized
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customised
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 Italian Vegetarian pizza for my vegan
friends
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.
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Lastly
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 the baklava dessert tasted like the original baklava of
turkey
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Turkey
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.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 we had a great time at your
restaurant
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and
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 we are pleased with
fabulous
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the fabulous
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 services provided by your staff. The quality of all the cuisine was
top notch
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top-notch
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along
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, along
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 with the dessert. I would like to thank you
as well as
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 each staff member
that
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who
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 elevated our experience at your
restaurant
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. We would definitely visit again and suggest our family
friends
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 as well. Sincerely, Mu

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts of the task, but add a bit more detail about the day and time of the visit.
task response
Task response: Your tone is warm and polite, but some lines sound a little too informal. Keep the style polite and clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are easy to follow, but some sentences are too long. Use full stops more often.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Link words are used well, but a few parts feel joined too fast. Make each main idea stand on its own.
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you went to the restaurant and what made the visit special.
task response
Task response: You give good examples of food, staff help, and service.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, body, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph mostly has one main idea, so the letter is easy to read.
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