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Band 5.5

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the proportion of
Man
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male
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 and
woman
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female
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workers
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 between
country
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 A and
country
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 B.
Overall
Linking Words
,
The
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the
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 pie charts
shows Big
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show big
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 differences between
Man
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male
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 and
women
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female
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workers
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 in
Two
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two
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 countries for
industry
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the industry
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. In
Between
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between
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 charts for
country
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 A
where
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, where
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 male
workers
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 get more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 to get industry near about(15%),
whereas
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 Female
workers
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 get
opportunity
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opportunities
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 only (8%) in
industry
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the industry
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.But
compare
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compared
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 to
that
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that,
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 women
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workers
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workers'
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 growth in
farming
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the farming
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 sector is huge (43%
)
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),
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while
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 Men
workers
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get
Verb problem
grow
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 in
farming
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the farming
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 sector less
Linking Words
then
Use the right word
than
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 (30%).In
services
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services,
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 there
are
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is
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also
Linking Words
better
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a better
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 proportion of Male
then
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 female. Contrast of
Country
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 A female worker,In
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country
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Country
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B
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B,
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the farming sector
also
Linking Words
 had
less
Correct determiner usage
fewer
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 female
worker
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workers
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,
Also
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 less in
service
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the service
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 and agriculture
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also
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sectors also
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.And there
is
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are
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 big differences between services
also
Linking Words
 in men and women
workers
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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