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There are many things that can motivate people to perform well in their work. These can include the salary, job satisfaction or the chance to help others. What do you feel is the best motivation to do well at work? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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Motivate
Wrong verb form
Motivating
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people
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 to perform
in their work well
Correct word order
well in their work
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 is different
between one to another
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for each other
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. In my opinion, the differentiation it hit most based on the
job
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 nature and work environment
which
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, which
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cover
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covers
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 the
job
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 satisfaction.
People
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 always look for
place
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a place
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 to be respected and encouraged in.
In addition
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, if two
people
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 are asked and one is
Doctor
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a doctor
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 and the other
one
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apply
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is Engineer the doctor will be more with helping others.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the engineer will be more with high salary.
Moreover
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, all
job
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 type if it missed a good environment and
not
Verb problem
do not
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 satisfy the person and never give
it
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them
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 the
feel
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feeling
 of achieving
new
Correct article usage
a new
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 level, absolutely will look for another
job
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.
For instance
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, if the doctor always
have
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has
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 bad
scheduling
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scheduling,
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patient time
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apply
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a new hospital or clinic will look for.
To sum up
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, a majority of
people
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looking
Verb problem
are looking
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 for respect and
amazing
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an amazing
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 environment that may let them accept less salary.

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task response
Answer the main question more clearly. Say one best reason for doing well at work, and keep this idea strong from start to end.
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Add one or two clear examples. Your doctor and engineer idea is useful, but it needs more detail to show why each person works well.
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Explain your points more. Some ideas are short, so the reader cannot fully see your meaning.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion. This will make your essay easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way. Words like 'first', 'also', 'for example', and 'in conclusion' can help.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph stay on one main idea. Now, some ideas change too fast.
task response
You answer the topic and give your opinion.
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You include an example about doctors and engineers.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a beginning and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
Some linking words are used, like 'In addition' and 'Moreover'.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • motivation
  • performance
  • salary
  • job satisfaction
  • help
  • others
  • support
  • families
  • focus
  • roles
  • happy
  • harder
  • stay
  • purpose
  • fulfillment
  • recognition
  • managers
  • peers
  • effort
  • excel
  • training
  • growth
  • career
  • advancement
  • inspire
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