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The pie charts below compare the proportion of energy capacity in gigawatts (GW) in 2015 with the predictions for 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided pie charts
gives
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give
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 information about
symmetry
Correct article usage
the symmetry
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 of
energy
Use synonyms
 volume in gigawatts between 2015 and 2040. Units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, at the beginning of the
period
Add a comma
period,
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the Fossil
Correct determiner usage
fossil
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fuels
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 occupied
higher
Rephrase
more
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 than half part in chart,
while
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 Solar
energy
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nearly wasn't
Verb problem
didn't
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 contribute
,
Correct word order
much; however,
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however
Linking Words
 at the
and
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end
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 of the period Fossil
fuels
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 showed
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 the lowest was Nuclear. In
2014
Punctuation problem
2014,
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 the proportion of
energy
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 reached 6.688
gw
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GW
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. The reason is that
,
Correct determiner usage
a
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 high percentage of Fossil
fuels
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 with 64%. At the same
time
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time,
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 Other renewables
energy
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 took the second
space
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place
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 with 23%. Contrariwise, 3 types of
energy
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 provided very
less
Correct determiner usage
few
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 points. One of them is Solar 2%, Nuclear 6%, and Wind reached 5%.
In addition
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, in the first
chart
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chart,
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 Fossil
hitting
Wrong verb form
hits
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 a high point. In
2040
Punctuation problem
2040,
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 results will change dramatically,
such
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 as Fossil
fuels
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 will decrease slowly and show 44%. But Solar
energy
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 will
booming
Wrong verb form
boom
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 during the year with 18% than the past. Nuclear will
nearly
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apply
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remain steady, it will reduce 1%,
while
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 it will hit a low point.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, fuels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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