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A resturant near your house is making a lot of noise. You called the manger but no action was taken. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: *Introduce yourself *Describe the problems you are facing because of this *suggest solutions

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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,
i
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I
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 am writing
this
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 letter to you
beacuse
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because
 of your cafeteria, it is difficult for many people to sleep well.
i
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I
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 mentioned
few
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a few
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 reasons to support my statement.
Initially
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, during late
night
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night,
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 many customers of your cafe make loud noises with their loud car
exhuasts
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exhausts
,
also
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, after
drinking
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drinking,
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 they tried to disturb so many neighbours
near
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apply
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around your place.
moving
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Moving
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further
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, at your restaurant
drinking
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, drinking
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 is
also
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 permited so after drinking lots of your customer did damage to the private property of so many
folks
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folks,
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that include
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including
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 my car. To add on
this
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,
due to
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 all
this
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 everone finds
difficult
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it difficult
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 to sleep well and cannot wake up early for their
works
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work
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.
To sum up
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, to control
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this
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this,
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 you should impose some rules in your bar.
such
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 as
,
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a
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 limit
of
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on
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 drinking,
as well as
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 no loud noise during dusk.
if
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If
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 you impose these
rules
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rules,
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 it will be a great help for
the
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apply
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society. Thank you Gurbakhshish singh

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a clear line to say who you are and where you live.
task response
Task response: Use a more polite tone, for example 'I am writing to complain about the noise from your restaurant.'
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order: problem, effect, solution. This is good, but link ideas with simple words like 'also', 'because', 'so', and 'therefore'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in each part and use full stops well. This will make the letter easier to follow.
task response
Task response: You cover the problem, the effects, and the solutions.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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