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The graph below shows food consumption in Australia between 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The line graph shows the information about
consumpation
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consumption
 of vegetables , fruit ,meat ,bread and seafood for
total
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the total
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of
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weight of
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wighting personal
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people
 per
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years
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year
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 in Australia from 1950 to 2020
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overall
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Overall
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, the
pepole
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people
 during
this
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 period had
variation
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a variation
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 in consumtion the food
but
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, but
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 the seefood in same level all
this
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years
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in
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In
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1950
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1950,
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 the vegetables had
high
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a high
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 wight 140
kg
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for one personal
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per person
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, on
anther
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the other
 hand
the
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, the
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seefood
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seafood
 only
sbened
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weighed
 20
kg
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, in
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. In
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1970
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1970,
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 all the food
drobet
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dropped
 from rised to
lowest
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the lowest
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 rate
then
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 befor ,
while
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 the bread increased to over 60
kg
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 per personal in the
1970
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1970,
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after
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this
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these
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years
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he
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, he
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 decreased
under
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to under
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 60
kg
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untial
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until
 2010.
from
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From
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 1970 to
2010
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2010,
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 the most
pepole
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people
 increased the wight from
fruit
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apply
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80
kg
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 to 140
kg
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and
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And
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 the meat go dowen the
last
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years
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 from 120 in 1990 to 80 in 2010 , in top the vegetable
take
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takes
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 the
bige consumpation
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biggest consumption
 160
kg
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 for one
persoanal
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person
 in 2010. ,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, kg with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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