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Completing UNIVERSITY EDUCATION IS THOUGHT BY SOME TO BE THE BEST way TO GET A GOOD JOB. on THE OTHER HAND, OTHER PEOPLE THINK THAT GETTING EXERIENCE AND DEVELOPING SOFT SKILLS IS MORE IMPORTANT?

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Some
people
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 argue that completing graduation plays an important role in getting a stable and better
career oriented
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career-oriented
employment
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employment,
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while
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 others believe that working for longer periods and getting
experience
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 benefits more than a
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degree
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degree,
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 as
this
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 helps in developing intrapersonal and interpersonal
skills
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which
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, which
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 only
comes
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come
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 with
experience
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. In my opinion, I
favor
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 the latter part of the view
and
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, and
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 essay will explore both of the viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. Contrary to the
aboveopinion
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above opinion
, completing
university
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a university
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degree
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 is the best method to find
high salaried
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high-salaried
 jobs. Owing to
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, getting a
degree
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 often
help
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helps
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 individuals in securing a better career and growth opportunities for their future.
Companies
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 always want to hire educated employees who have completed their education from the
top ranked
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top-ranked
 universities
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, as
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 approach not only
benefit
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benefits
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 multinational
companies
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 for their growth
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but
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aid
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 in building their reputation.
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, university certificates increase the chance of getting hired as compared to
people
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 who are without graduation degrees.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 have different opinions as some think that developing soft
skills
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 should be considered a deciding factor over
a
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the
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 completion of a
degree
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 in order to find a job. To elaborate, interpersonal and intrapersonal
skills
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 are the most important factors when it comes to
an
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apply
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employment
,
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;
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 many
companies
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 want their workers to know how to interact with their clients and colleagues. And
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 could only be possible if a person has soft
skills
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 which can
get
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be
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 developed with practice and consistency.
For example
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, many
companies
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 in metropolitan cities
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in India
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 are now
started hiring
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starting to hire
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 more
people
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 who are more vocal and can communicate well in an appropriate way in front of their customers.
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, gaining more work
experience
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 is
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 considered to be
helpful
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more helpful
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 in finding a job than
getting graduated
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graduating
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. If
people
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 are more experienced and
had
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 worked for almost 5- 10 years in a certain company,
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 makes a person more
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
 and makes them
elegible
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eligible
 to handle a difficult situation well as compared to
thosw
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those
 who
is an amateur
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are amateurs
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 and
a
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have
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 recently graduated without
a
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apply
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prior
experience
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. In conclusion,
although
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 completing a
degree
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 is highly important for
people
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 whose job profession requires and only depends upon
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degree
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a degree
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, having prior
experience
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 with developed soft
skills
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 should always be considered a suitable candidate when it comes to hiring for a certain role in a company.

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Answer both sides in a more even way. Your view is clear, but one side has more detail than the other.
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Add one or two more clear examples to support your main ideas.
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Make each main idea very clear at the start of the paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use shorter sentences. Some long sentences are hard to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas more smoothly. Some parts jump too fast from one point to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Check paragraph unity. Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
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You answered the question and gave your opinion clearly.
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You included both views and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphing with introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You used linking words like 'On the other hand' and 'Moreover'.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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