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In some countries, it is illegal for employers to reject applying for a job because of his/her age. Discuss positive and negative. Give your opinion.

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In my opinion, it
is
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has both a
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positive
 and negative impact for
employers
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 to reject
applying jobs
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job applicants
 because of
age
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 in some countries. In the positive view, it will be rewarding sometimes for
employers
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 to give these
opportuinities
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opportunities
 to an individual regardless of their
age
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, as
i
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 feel
age
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 should not be a determinant of how well the person can perform in their job roles,
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 it could create a positive impact on the company when they hire the right person. It could
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 be very dangerous as
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this
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these
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employers
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 could be creating an unsafe
enviroment
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environment
 for younger people who might not be of
age
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 to take up a role.
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 it can be illegal to reject applications,
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this
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employers
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also
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 have the right to ensure the rules of employment
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 followed in accordance. In conclusion, in my opinion, it should be important to go through laws
binding
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governing
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 employment in some of
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 It will be beneficial to weigh both the positives and negatives before arriving at a final take.

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Answer both sides more fully. Say more about the good side and the bad side.
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Give a clear opinion and keep it the same from start to end.
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Use one real or clear example to support each main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make one main idea in each body part, then explain it step by step.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear link words like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one.
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You answered the topic and showed both good and bad sides.
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You gave your opinion in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a start, body, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Some link words are used, like in conclusion and while.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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