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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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percentage
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 of
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drug
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the drug
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company's
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companies'
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 total sales in
America
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,
Europe
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 and
Asia
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 from 2002 to 2006.
Overall
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,we can see that
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drug
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the drug
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 has been sold the most in
America
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 in 2002 and the least
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in
Asia
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.But in 2006,
Asia
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 was the country with the most
drug
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 sales ,
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America
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 and
Europe
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 had the same
percentage
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. In
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2002,we can see that
Asia
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 had only have 25% that using banned substances prove that
Asia
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 has the lowest
percentage
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 of
drug
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 use.But in 2006,
Asia
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 loosened the
drug
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 laws so that
drug
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 has used become 40%,an increase 15% compared to 2002.Meanwhile,
America
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 and
Europe
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 have decreased the
percentage
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 of
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drugs
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drug
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.In 2006 ,
America
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 in 2006 has reduced 11% , and
Europe
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has
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 decreased 4%. From 2002 to 2004,
Europe
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 has
lossen
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loosened
 banned substances so that the
percentage
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 of use has increased from 34% to 38%,the highest used
drug
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 from 2002 to 2006.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, drug, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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