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The plan below show the layout of the ground floor of a museum in 1990 and in 2010 . Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main featured, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two plans below illustrate the layout of the ground floor of a
museum
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 in 1990 and in 2010.
Overall
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, the most significant changes were
done
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made
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 in the western part of the
museum
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,
while
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 the other areas remained unchanged, with a few minor modifications. For starters, the first noticeable change is that the statue was moved to the
center
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centre
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 of the entrance area.
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, the Archaeology gallery
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, which
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 occupied a large area in 1990, was divided into two sections in 2010: Children’s interactive zone andPoster display area. Another significant change is the installation of a lift in the left corner between the Natural
history
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History
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 room and
Cafe
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the Cafe
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 and Gift shop.
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,
beside
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besides
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 these changes, the layout of the
museum
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 stayed quite the same. The stairs were left unchanged,
while
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 the Gift shop had a small improvement, a cafe was added to it. The Reception counter
also
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 received some alterations
,
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 it was moved away from the
Museum
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 office.

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task response
Give more key changes. You missed some small but important points on the map.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer compare words like 'while', 'but', and 'in contrast' to link ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Check small details and word spacing, for example 'andPoster' and 'quite the same'.
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Make the last paragraph more exact. Some ideas are a bit general.
task response
You gave a clear overall view in the first part.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a simple and easy paragraph plan.
task response
You described the main west side changes well.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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