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The table above show sales of fair trade coffee and bananas in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004. Write a report of aat least 150 words summarising the main details and making comparisons where relevant,

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The table compares the
number of
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amount
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 spent on Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in two separate years in the
UK
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,
Swizerland
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Switzerland
,
Denmark
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, Belgium and Sweden.
It is clear that
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of
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sales of
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 Fairtrade coffee rose in all five European countries through the period, but
sales
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 of Fairtrade bananas only went up in three out of the five countries.
Overall
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, the
UK
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 saw by far the highest levels of spending on the two products. Looking first at coffee
sales
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, all five countries followed an upward trend over the period. The
UK
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 saw
the
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a
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 dramatic increase, with
sales
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 rising from 1,5 millions of
euros
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 in 1999 to 20
millions of
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million
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euros
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 in 2004. Switzerland
also
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 saw a steady increase, with
sales
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 rising from 3
million
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 to 6
million
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euros
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.
Moreover
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,
Denmark
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, Belgium,
Sweden
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and Sweden
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 all saw moderate increases, reaching 2
million
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, 1,7
million
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 and 1
million
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euros
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 respectively. Regarding banana
sales
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, the pattern was more varied. It is
also
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 noticeable that increases in
sales
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 can be seen in the
UK
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, Switzerland and
Denmark
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. The
UK
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 experienced the most dramatic growth, with
sales
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 rising from 15
million
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 to 47
million
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euros
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,
while
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 the
figure
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figures
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 for
Denmark
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 and Switzerland increased to 4
million
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 and 5,5
million
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euros
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respectively
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, respectively
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.
By contrast
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, Belgium saw a considerable decline, with
sales
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 dropping gradually from 1,8
million
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 to 1
million
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euros
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.
Sales
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 in Sweden were far lower, decreasing to just 0,9
million
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euros
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 in 2004

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, denmark, sales, euros, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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