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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995–2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
bart
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bar
 chart illustrates the
number
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 of
minutes
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 of
smartphone’s call
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smartphone calls
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in the UK from 1995-
2002
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 parted in three different groups .
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 of fixed
line
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 precisely national and international
calls
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,
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 rose considerably and for mobile call that increased
sharply
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sharply,
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 even though it was the least common calls over
years
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the years
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 .
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, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 of
ceiling local
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local ceiling
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 calls from fixed
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line
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lines
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 reaches a peak before coming back to its original position. In detail, the
minutes
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 of international and national calls from fixed
line
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 at
beginning
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the beginning
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was
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were
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 originally around 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 before steadily rising over
years
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the years
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 to reach 60
billions
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billion
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minutes
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 in 2002 .
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, the
number
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 of
minutes
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 of local calls from fixed
line
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that
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, which
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 was
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firstly
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initially
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 around 70
billion
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 in 1995 and
also
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 the most popular call
type
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type,
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 rose slightly in 1999
for
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to
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 90
billion
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minutes
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 before coming back to his first position in 2002 . Contrary to mobile calls that hit
the
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their
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 lowest at the beginning
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number
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apply
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with approximately 3
billion
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minutes
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sharply
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, sharply
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 increased over
years
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the years
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 to reach around 45
billion
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minutes
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but
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, but
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 remained the least common
call’s
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call
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 type.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, minutes, line, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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