You have recently visited a city on vacation and stayed in a hotel. Write a letter to the manager about your stay. In your letter: - Give details of your stay - What were the high & low points of the hotel - What are your suggestions; recommendations and / or complaints about the hotel

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Dear Mrs K, I hope you are in radiant,
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vibrant health.
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week ,I got a chance to stay at your hotel for 4 days, as I was in your city
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mine
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professional commitments . The room
alloted
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301.
Seaside
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view from my room window was majestic ,and it was accompanied by the cool breeze from the sea. The basic
amenties
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amenities
provided by the hotel were excellent,
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the room service. I would have to rate the staff, I would give five star rating. Every task they handled , they completed
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with excellent professionalism. Everything went great except the water leak ,
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had to face on my
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day of stay . I had notified the reception about
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issue on exact moment, but the plumber
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when I was about to
checkout
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. I would suggest that, if you can hire a permanent plumber,
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of simple issues can be avoided. I hope next time when I am staying again at your hotel, I
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not face the same issue. Yours faithfully, S.S

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add one more clear point about the bad part of the stay.
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Task response: Keep the tone polite and direct. Some lines are too long or not natural.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order, but some sentences are too long. Use shorter sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Put one main idea in each paragraph: stay details, good points, bad point, suggestions.
task response
Task response: You give clear details of your stay, like 4 days and room 301.
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Task response: You mention both good and bad points, and you give a suggestion.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening and closing.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The order is easy to follow from stay details to problem to suggestion.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
Topic Vocabulary:
  • I stayed at your hotel for three nights last week.
  • I visited the city on vacation with my family.
  • The best part of my stay was the helpful staff.
  • My room was clean, bright, and comfortable.
  • The hotel is in a very good location.
  • Breakfast was fresh and had many choices.
  • One problem was the loud noise at night.
  • The Wi-Fi was very slow and often stopped working.
  • The air conditioning did not work well.
  • The bathroom was not as clean as I expected.
  • I would like to make a small complaint.
  • I suggest that you check the rooms more carefully.
  • It would be better if the hotel improved room service.
  • I hope you can look into this matter.
  • I look forward to your reply.
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