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The chart below shows the percentage of river water in UK rivers that is classified as having good chemical quality between 1990 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the rates of rivers having fair chemical quality among
river
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the river
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water
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waters
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 of the United Kingdom from 1990 to 2002.
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, all rivers experienced an increase,
although
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,
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apply
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 the extent of growth varied considerably.
while
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, Nothern ireland had the first place, rivers like
Scotland
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which was
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were
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at
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in
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 the
last
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 position . In detail, Wales recorded 95% of good chemical quality at the beginning, followed by
Nothern ireland
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Northern Ireland
 with 85%
and
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, and
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 they remained stable in the next years .
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,
Nothern ireland
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Northern Ireland
 caught up
Wales
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with Wales
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 with around 90% in 1999 and ranked first before remaining stable at around 95%
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in
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, in
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 contrast to Wales
that
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, which
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 kept decreasing since 1998. Meanwhile, England and
Scotland
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 were much lower
with
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, with
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 approximately 45% and 20%, respectively, before increasing .
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, England sharply increased and peaked in 1996 to 70%, before dramatically dropping and meeting
Scotland
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 at around 40% that was starting
increasing
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to increase
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.
At the end
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 of
period
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the period
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, England rose to 50% and overtook
Scotland
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 .

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Vocabulary: Replace the words scotland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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