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Band 2.5

Many small businesses are being forced to close because they are unable to compete with multinational corporations. What problem does this cause and how can those problems be solved?

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In
recently
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recent
 years, there
are
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have been
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 many
markets
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 which have been opening. These markest seperated into two types
according to
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 popurity
such
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 as local and multinational
businesses
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 .
In addition
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, small
businesses
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 struggel of colsed because they
enter into competing
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compete
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 with multinational
corporation
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corporations
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. The local shops face many problems to
make
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maintain
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 balance and
invesment
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investment
 stability.
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, new or small
markets
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 need to show
discount
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discounts
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 and offer to attract the
custemers
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customers
, and keep
on
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them. In
addtion
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addition
, these
markets
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 conflic many
taxe
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taxes
 and
fee
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fees
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 from ministries that are responsible to improve the quality of life.
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, all these
resonces
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resources
 reduce income from the small
markets
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 and put them under pressure. Big and multinational
businesses
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are
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apply
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deal with taxes and
fess
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fees
 better than small
businesses
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due to
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 strong team
manegment
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management
.
Furthermore
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, the
competetion
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competition
 between the are not
fear
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fair
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because the small shops miss experiance and crafty
worker
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workers
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.
Moreever
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Moreover
, their ability to
widespread
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spread
 quickly and
high
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a high
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 budget to
deat
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deal
 with financial
proplems
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problems
. In conclusion, governments have a responsibility to maintain their local
shopes
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shops
 from taxes and fees. and put
planes
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plans
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 for them to force big shops to make
balance
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a balance
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 between them and make the decision on custermor to select which of them is good to
conteniou
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continue
.

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task response
Answer both parts more clearly. You talk about problems and one way to help, but the ideas are not full.
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Add clear examples. For example, say how a small shop loses buyers or workers when a big company comes.
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Make each main idea easy to understand. Some sentences are hard to follow because of word choice and grammar.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear plan: introduction, problems, solutions, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Start each paragraph with one main idea, then explain it.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, because, so, and finally.
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You answer the topic and talk about small shops and big companies.
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You include both problems and solutions, which is important for this task.
coherence and cohesion
There is an introduction and a short conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to group ideas about taxes, workers, and money in one body paragraph.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community character
  • multinational corporations
  • economic decline
  • monopoly
  • tax incentives
  • grants
  • buy local campaigns
  • niche products
  • personalized services
  • economic ecosystem
  • business partnerships
  • competitive advantage
  • consumer choice
  • market diversity
  • entrepreneurial spirit
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