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The diagrams below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
diarrams
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diagrams
 below
illustrartes
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illustrate
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 a
school
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 building in 1985 and now.
Overall
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, on the map were added Learning Source
Centre
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 with the Computer room inside, another
classrom
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classroom
, and
Pool
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a pool
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 with a fitness
centre
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 with it. The playing
field
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 became smaller. The
path
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 around
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car
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the car
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park
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 to
playing
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the playing
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field
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were
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was
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 removed.
Also
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 removed a
library
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 and
second
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the second
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car
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park
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. Coming from the entrance by the
path
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, on the left
side
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 was
square
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a square
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car
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park
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 and on the
right
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side
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 an office. In the
continue
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continuation
 of the
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path
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path,
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 there was a small
car
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park
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 and a classroom on the left
side
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. Behind it stands a huge
library
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. On the
right
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side
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 of the
path
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replaced
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,
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 a classroom with 2 storeys
in it
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was replaced
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.
At the end
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 of the
path
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 comes a big playing
field
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.
In contrast
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from
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to
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 the old
school
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with
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and
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 the
school
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 now, there are
quit
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quite
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 many differences in the structures of
two
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the two
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 maps. The entrance, the exit and the office
at
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in
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 the left corner near
to
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the
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 entrance stay
as
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the
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 same as in the past. The
car
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park
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 and the
path
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 around it become more
cyrcular
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circular
 in shape
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then
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than
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 before. The
path
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 to
playing
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the playing
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field
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 is
absolutelly
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absolutely
 removed. On the
right
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side
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 of the
ex
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exit
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path
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path,
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 the
car
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park
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 and the
library
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 were removed from the
school
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.
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However
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However,
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 the classrooms
which was
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that were
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 below the
library
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 were replaced
under
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with
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 the new place
which
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, which
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 is
learning
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the learning
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 resources
centre
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.
Iside
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Inside
 the
centre
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, also
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also is added a computer room
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a computer room has also been added
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 as
the
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a
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 helping room. After
classrooms
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the classrooms
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is build
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are built
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a
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, a
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pool and a fitness
centre
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with it
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will be added
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. The huge playing
field
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reduce
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is reduced
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 in size and placed
on
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in
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 the
right
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 corner. The new classrooms were
build
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built
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 below the playing
field
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. A classroom block with 2 storeys became
with
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apply
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3 storeys
in it
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apply
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, centre, field, path, car, park, library, side, right with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transformation
  • infrastructural developments
  • primary school building
  • sports field
  • car park
  • basic layout
  • expansion
  • facilities
  • modernization
  • refurbished
  • student intake
  • educational needs
  • capacity
  • faculty
  • contemporary
  • physical education
  • extracurricular activities
  • greenery
  • ecological efforts
  • aesthetic improvement
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