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Bar chart shows the top ten countries for consumption and production of electricity in 2014.

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The given bar chart shows the top ten countries for
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consumption
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the consumption
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 and
production
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 of
electricity
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 in 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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china
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China
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 got the highest number in both
production
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 and
consumption
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 .
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Another noticeable
 point is that korea rep got the
least
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lowest
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production
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 and
consumption
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number
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numbers
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. In the beginning ,
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china
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China
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 and united states as the the highest country on
electricity
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 figures . Moreovere
china
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's
production
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electricity
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of electricity
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 is 5398
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while
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, while
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 the
consumption
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electricity
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of electricity
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 is 5322 .
In
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 the other hand , united states got 4099
electricity
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prodution whail
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production while its electricity consumption
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consumption
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electricity
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 is 3866.
Regading
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Regarding
 the
remaininh
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remaining
 information,
korea
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Korea
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 got the lowest
electricity
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production
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 at 485.1
and
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, and
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 they got in
consumption
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electricity
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 449.5 . In the
last
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 ,
china
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 as the highest got the higest
consumption
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 and
production
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while
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, while
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 korea got the lowest.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, production, electricity, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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