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The given line graph illustrates the figure for carbon dioxide emitted by each person in four countries in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007.

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This
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 line graph shows key information about CO2 emitted by people in four nations in Europe over a span of 40 years, from 1967 to 2007. The emissions measurement in metric tonnes.
Overall
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, it is clear from
graph
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the graph
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 that
UK
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the UK
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 and Sweden
are
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have
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 decreased,
while
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 Italy and Portugal
are
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have
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 increased. The UK obtained
highest
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the highest
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 number
which
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, which
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start
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started
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 in 1967 with around 11 metric tonnes, and decreased slightly until the
year
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 2007
where
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, when
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 it
arrived to
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reached
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 9.
In addition
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, Sweden
also
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 decreased, starting from above 8
at
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in
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 the
year
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 1967 and increased
dramaticely
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dramatically
 until the
year
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 1977
which
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, which
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got
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reached
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 10 metric tonnes,
then
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 it decreased to 5 in
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year
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the year
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 2007.
According to
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 what is shown, Italy started at approximately 4 in 1967
and
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, and
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 it
rises
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rose
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 until 1977,
then
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 increased slightly to 7
at
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in
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 1997,
therefor
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therefore
, it remained stable until the
year
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 2007.
However
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, Portugal started from 1 and
growing
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grew
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 until 5
at the
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in
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year
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 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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