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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the generation and usage of
an
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electricity within
top
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the top
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 10 different nations in 2014.
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, it can be seen that, from both the
production
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 and consumption perspectives, China ranked first.
On the contrary
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,
Korean
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the Korean
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 Republic's usage and
production
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 were ranked much lower
respectively
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, respectively
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.
In addition
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,
consumption's usage of the country,
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the country's
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 (Germany)
exceeded
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consumption exceeded
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the
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production
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 at that time. China and
United
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the United
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States's
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States'
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 electricity
need
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needs
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 and
production
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 exceeded
the other countries index's
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those of other countries
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.
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,
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 Korea and Germany are ranked as the lowest
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 to others. But, Germany's consumption was greater than
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production
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 by almost 60billion kWh. The countries that produced more than
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they consumed
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 were the USA and France
by
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,
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 producing 200billion kWh
than
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more than
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 consuming.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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