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Some people believe that governments should provide free public transportation to reduce traffic congestion and pollution. Others argue that individuals should pay for the services they use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Ans: It is an irrefutable fact that traffic congestion and pollution have become
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pressing issues in recent years.
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 some
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 argue that providing free public transportation is a prudent strategy to deal with these problems, others reject
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 notion and believe that these initiatives will increase the financial burden on the government. I totally agree with the former statement.
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 are of the view that
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 programme will force the government to allocate more funds for the maintenance of state-funded transport
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. When a large number of
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 travel without paying a service fee, the government’s revenue will decrease.
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, when more
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use free
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, the maintenance cost for facilitating transport
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 will be higher than usual.
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, in order to add more buses, metros, and trains for serving the public, funding allocated to road development may be reduced. The poor condition of the
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 may result in delays in other
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 for the general public,
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 as ambulance
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, freight movement, and fire evacuation
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, in my opinion, the environmental damage
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 road congestion is a major concern
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 which needs to be addressed as a priority nowadays. I take the side of the
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 who support the perspective that free access to public transportation will help mitigate environmental damage by reducing the number of
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 on the
roads
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. Many
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 prefer driving their own
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 because it is more convenient
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 they
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 slightly more for owning and maintaining
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 leads to increased air pollution through the emission of gases by the use of more and more private cars and bikes.
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, if an individual can use public buses without any service charges, it will encourage them to abandon their private vehicle for daily commuting.
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, it will significantly contribute to environmental protection by minimising the number of
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 on the
roads
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, many cities in India have observed a tremendous improvement in
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 air quality index when they stopped accepting any bus fare from the commuters because
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 of private cars
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declined in the city. In conclusion,
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people
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 strongly argue that providing free commuting service is not a prudent step
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 its adverse impacts on other public
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, I firmly believe protecting our
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ecosystem
 is holds a more significance.
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, offering free transportation is a great initiative that the government should take to alleviate traffic congestion on the
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Task response
Score: 6. Your answer deals with the question well, but it is not fully strong. You say free travel should be given, yet you do not explain how the government can pay for it. Add one or two ideas, such as money from tax, parking fees, or a charge for cars in busy city areas.
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Your India example is useful, but it is too broad. Say one city, what changed, and why this shows your point. Also, do not make a very strong claim unless you can show it clearly.
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The first body part gives many bad results of free travel. This is good for balance, but your reply to these bad results is short. After them, explain why the good side is still greater.
Coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. The order is easy to follow, but some parts have too many ideas at once. For example, the first body part moves from cost, to roads, to ambulances, to fire help. Keep one main idea in each part.
Coherence and cohesion
Make the main sentence of each body part more direct. Body 1 could be about cost to the state. Body 2 could be about less car use and cleaner air.
Coherence and cohesion
Some links are not fully clear. “On the other hand” is not the best link after the point about less state money, because both ideas are about cost. Use “In addition” there instead.
Coherence and cohesion
Your last paragraph repeats your view, which is good. Make it shorter and more exact: free public transport can cut car use, traffic, and air harm, but the state must plan how to pay for it.
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You give a clear view: you agree that free public transport can help cut traffic and air harm.
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You discuss both sides, then give reasons for your own side.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an end.
Coherence and cohesion
Words such as “On the other hand”, “However”, “Moreover”, and “For example” help the reader follow your ideas.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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