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A bar chart shows the percentage of men and women in Great Britain who had driving licenses and another bar chart shows the percentage of men and women who were young drivers at the age of 17-20. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
chart
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illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion between
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 in British
citizen
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citizens
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 who
had
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have
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 driving licenses
and
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, and
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 another
chart
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 displays the proportion of boys and
gilrs
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girls
 less than 20 years old, expressed by percentages.
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, the
males
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was
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were
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 gradually increasing throughout the period, in
the
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apply
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both
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chart
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charts
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.
while
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 the female less than
males
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 as we can
easly
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easily
 see. By starting the time, men
was
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were
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 marginally increased. In 2006,
males
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 reached the highest
level
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apply
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percentage of 80%. 20- 17 old
males
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driving
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are driving
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 its obvious in
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chart
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the chart
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 male more than women. Women seems like the men was slightly decreased by driving under 20 years old, but the proportion was relatively increased throughout the period until 2006, the percentage was 70%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, males with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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