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The charts below show the reasons of students to study a particular in a UK university in the year 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

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The two pie charts compare the reasons why
students
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 in the UK selected a college or university in 1987 and 2007.
Overall
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, suitable degree courses remained the most important
factor
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 in both years,
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 the importance of good sports and social activities increased considerably.
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,
quality
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 teaching and being close to the parental home became less significant over the period. In 1987, 35% of
students
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 chose a university because it offered suitable degree courses, making
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 the leading reason.
Quality
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 of resources was the second most common
factor
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 at 21%, followed by good sports and social activities at 19%. Meanwhile,
quality
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 teaching accounted for 15%, and only 10% of
students
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 selected a university because it was close to their parental home. By 2007, the proportion of
students
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 choosing institutions for suitable degree courses had risen slightly to 37%, maintaining its position as the most popular reason. The percentage citing being close to home more than doubled to 22%, making it the second most important
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.
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quality
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 of resources declined to 17%,
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 good sports and social activities fell marginally to 18%. The least influential
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 was
quality
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 teaching, which decreased sharply from 15% to just 6%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, factor, quality with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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