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You work for a company and have recently been assigned to train a new employee.However, you feel that you are not the right person for this resposibility. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: Explain why you think you are not suitable for training the new employee. describe the problems you are currently facing suggest an alternative soultion

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Dear Smith, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
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 letter to request you to unassign me for
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training
 a new staff
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 we hired recently.
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 appreciate your consideration
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 am not the suitable person for
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 role at the moment. The main reason is that
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 have recently joined the company and
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am still getting familiarised
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 with the department and internal procedures.
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 may not be able to give
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 can become a reason for incomplete training.
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 do not have good mentoring skills
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 working on a much
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 if i ll be
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 in both tasks, it can impact both negatively.
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 want to put
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 my current project to meet the deadlines. May
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 suggest that
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 Raj would be
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 suitable trainer for
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 company from
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 5 years and
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 adequate experience to guide new employees. I myself got the training from him and felt it
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 productive. Thanks for your understanding. I will be waiting for your response. Your faithfully, Manpreet kaur

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task response
You answer all three parts: why you are not the right person, the problems you have now, and another plan. Add a little more detail about how Mr Raj can help the new worker.
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The tone is polite, but make your request more direct: ask your manager to give the training job to Mr Raj.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: request, reasons, work problem, and a new plan. Use simple link words such as “Also”, “For this reason”, and “Therefore” to join ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The second paragraph has two reasons, so you could split it into two short paragraphs.
language accuracy
Check key forms: write “I have recently joined”, “I am still getting familiar”, “I’ll be involved”, “Mr Raj has worked here for five years”, and “Yours faithfully”.
task response
You give clear reasons: you are new, you are still learning the work, and you have an important project.
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Your idea to ask Mr Raj to train the new worker is clear and useful.
coherence and cohesion
Each part is easy to find, and the letter moves in a logical way.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are polite and fit a letter to a manager.
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