The graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK (expressed in percentage terms).

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The given line graph illustrates the percentage of electronic device
access
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in the United
kingdom
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from 1996 to 2003.
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, CD player is accounted for
largest
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the largest
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share holder
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shareholder
in all the years
and
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, and
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their
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there
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is
fluchuation
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fluctuation
between home computer and mobile phone. They is no internet
access
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at first two years
and
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from 1998 network witnessed a steady growth. Looking at the data in detail, CD player usages around 60% in
year
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the year
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1996/1997 and by 2002/
2003
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2003,
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access
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increased to more than 80%. Home computer was availability was slighty rosed all the years from 30% to under 60%.
Turnning
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Turning
to others, early 1996
moblie
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mobile
phone usage was below 20% and between 1998/1999
was
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it
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overtook
the
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apply
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computer
access
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. By 2002/2003
moblie
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mobile
usage was 70%, just under the CD player. Their is no internet till 1998
and
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from
then
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internet
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on, internet
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using was dramatic rising fro 10% to around 45% by the end of 2003.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words access with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • technological advancements
  • digital divide
  • accessibility
  • ubiquitous computing
  • smart home devices
  • telecommunication
  • multi-purpose gadgets
  • innovation
  • connectivity
  • obsolete
  • trend analysis
  • consumer electronics
  • statistical data
  • percentile growth
  • demographics
  • chart interpretation
  • gadgets
  • integration
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