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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the
portion
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 of
water
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 used for separate purposes in six areas of the world.
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, the
use
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 for agriculture is the most popular point in 3 uses of
water
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,
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 the opposite was true for the domestic
use
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. Looking at the
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 of
water
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 used for agriculture in six areas of the world, Central
Asia
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 and Africa ranked
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first and second rank which
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 up
for
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88
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percent
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 and 84
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portion
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, respectively. Followed by 81
proportion
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water
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the water
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 of Southeast
Asia
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 and 71
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
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water
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the water
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 of South
America
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. Meanwhile, the lowest
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 for agriculture is North
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 and Europe, which only account for 39
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percent
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 and 32
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portion
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. Moving to the industrial
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 of
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, the highest
portion
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 ever in the world is from Europe, which stands
by
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 53
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percent
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. In comparison, North
America
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 takes up about 48
proportion
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. In
the opposite
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, 12
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percentage
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, 10
portion
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 and 7
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percent
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 are experienced in Southeast
Asia
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, South
America
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 and Africa in the amount of
water
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 used for industry, in the same order.
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, only 5
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percent
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 is used for industrial
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needs
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 in
the
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Central
Asia
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. Regarding
to
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the
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 purpose, the
water
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need
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 for domestic
, South
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use, South
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America
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 accounts for 19
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 followed by 15
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portion
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 of Europe and 13
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percentage
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per cent
 of North
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. Compared to only 9
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portion
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 of domestic
water
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of
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 Africa,
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, in the smallest ranks, both Southeast
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 and Central
Asia
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 shared the same amount of
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 used for domestic, about 7
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words portion, water, use, percentage, asia, percent, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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