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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

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The line graph
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 indicates the percentages of Australian exports to Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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, and India from 1990 to 2021.
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,
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 the export rate between Australia and
China
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 gradually
inreased
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increased
 to the peak. Over the
15 years-period
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15-year period
 from 1990 to
2006
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2006,
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 the percentages of Australian
export
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exports
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 to India and
China
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 were steady. The percentage was slightly upper than 10%
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 in 2008 it significantly rose
up
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to 30% for
China
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. In
case
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 of
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the US
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US
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 there is no noticeable change
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 than a slow decline 10% to 8%. During the time percentage of
export
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exports
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 in Japan was
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high
near
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, near
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 28%
but
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 it
also
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 declined to 17%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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