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Interviews form the basic selecting criteria for most large companies. However, some people think that the interview is not a reliable method of choosing whom to employ and that there are other better methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is questioned
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whether interviewing a person is the best way to determine their suitability for a
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. Though I believe that merely the interviewing method can help companies decide if a person is capable
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, it is
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 true that it is not the only one that can help with the criteria identification. In
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why the process of interviewing is not the best method.
Body paragraph 1
Metaphorically, we wear masks that cover up who we really are. In certain situations
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, an interview would be an inadequate method to find out who people really are and if they have what it takes to work for the company. I believe that a better solution would be to temporarily allow the
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applicants
 to work for the company. After a short period of time, leaders should decide whether the
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applier
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applicant
 should be hired based on their
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, work productivity, etc.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 an interview only gives an insight
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 who a person is under formal circumstances, giving them a temporary try out
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 the actual
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 can be significantly more effective
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 understanding who they really are.

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Make your position more clear in the first paragraph. You seem to agree that interviews are not the best way, but the first sentence says interviews can help. State clearly that you agree, partly agree, or disagree.
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Give two main reasons, not only one. For example, say that some people can act well in an interview, and that an interview may not show real work skills.
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Add a real or clear made-up example. For instance, a person may speak very well in an interview but make many mistakes when doing the job.
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Explain why a short work test is better. Say what the company can see during the test, such as work speed, skill, care, and how the person works with others.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clearer plan: first paragraph with your view, one body paragraph for the problem with interviews, one body paragraph for the better method, then a short ending.
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Your second body paragraph has both the problem and the answer. Split these into two paragraphs so that each main idea has more space and detail.
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Use simple links to show the order of your ideas: 'First,' 'Also,' 'For example,' 'As a result,' and 'In conclusion.'
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Avoid repeating 'who people really are.' You can use 'their real skills,' 'their usual behavior,' or 'how they work' instead.
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You answer the question directly and give a clear better way: a short period of real work before the final choice.
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Your main point is relevant: people may not act in the same way in an interview as they do at work.
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The essay has an opening, a main paragraph, and an ending. The ending returns to your main idea.
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The ideas move in a clear order from the limits of interviews to a possible answer.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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